Scabs
I like to pick my scabs.
I’ve done so ever
since I was a child. My mother used to slap my hand away when it drifted
towards my scabby knees, telling me that it would only make it bigger and take
longer to heal. Though when I was six, I took no notice and did so when she
wasn’t around. I used to love the scabs that were bumpy, that were rough to the
touch and bubbled when you push down on them. They were the ones you could
really get your nails under the sides of and pick away at, the ones that tore
your skin ever so slightly more each time they peeled off.
Now I’m older, I don’t get scabs very often; so I was quite
shocked and secretly delighted I got another one after falling off my bike on
the way to work. It was late in the evening, while I was watching TV that my
hand reminded me of it as I rubbed my elbow, its coarse, crumbly feel
contrasting against my smooth skin. I had a habit of biting my nails, so I
struggled to get a good grip on it. Once I had it under my bitten nail, I
flicked up the edge of the scab; shivering as the sting wisped up my arm. I
pinched the dried skin and pulled gently. As it peeled backwards, the
vulnerable, bloody pink flesh underneath was revealed. I poked it gingerly,
still pinching its protector between my thumb and fingers; taking a sharp
intake of breath as blood seeped out in droplets. I examined the scab with a
weird sort of gratification. It was big, much bigger than I thought it was.
Yet this wasn’t the whole scab.
I placed it carefully on my knee and felt the prickling
wound once more. The sides of the scab is still stuck around the edge of the
wound, sharp and jagged. I began to pick them off. However, one was stubborn. I
gripped it with the tips of my fingers and pulled.
Too hard.
The scab ripped itself up my arm, splitting my skin all the
way up to my shoulder, getting wider as it grew. I smiled, I loved this part. I tugged the
length of skin across my chest, under my shirt and down one side. Blood poured
down my body, sticking my shirt to the wound and binding itself to me as it
clotted. The length of skin had grown to be the size of A4 paper and was deep
enough to put the tip of my finger in. I lifted up my crusty shirt above my
stomach, and tore the skin off; relishing in the sensation of my skin ripping
apart, pulling away from my muscles and splitting off at the end.
I sat back in my chair, holding the sheet of skin with a
dazed expression. I felt content. I felt satisfied. I felt at ease.
I like to pick my scabs.
Really good story. Fits in well with the Halloween theme due to it being grusome, and also scary if afraid of blood and scabs!!
ReplyDeleteI like the way there is a circular feel to the fiction with the beginning and ending being the same. It reminds the reader that it is a flash fiction story but also gives it a complete feel.
Use of adjectives and alliteration is detailed and well included. "Coarse, crumbly feel contrasting" makes the reader feel as though they are the one picking the scabs as it is so well described and leaves a big, grusome impact on the reader.
The use of first person invlolves the audience and creates a bigger impact due to them feeling as though they themselves are apart of the situation. By the reader feeling as though they are the ones picking the scabs it makes it much more suitable for Halloween as it is more grusome and scary to read.
I like this story. You have used a good range of adjectives and sentence types. Its perfect for the auidence as everyone can relate to scabs. its extrememly grusome which fits in with the purpose of this story.
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